Modblog 6


Thanks to everyone who has taken part over the last couple of months. This week I am grateful to David Andrews ( Ipads in Primary Education) for three examples of work which have based on the iPad game "Bike Baron".  The Bike Baron Project is described in detail here and here!

The three writing examples will be named x, y and z. Any comments and suggested levels will be greatly appreciated. The task is a recount based on an experience that occurred in the Bike Baron game.


Writer X
Writer Y
Writer Z

A general overview of Level 3 writing
  • Simple and compound sentences with connectives (such as ‘because’, ‘but’ and ‘while’).
  • Some variety of sentence openings.
  • Writing style is sometimes adapted deliberately and usually relevant to suit the purpose.
  • Sentences show an understanding of sentence structure and include accurate use of capital letters and full-stops.
  • Speech marks, question marks and exclamation marks sometimes used correctly.
  • Some adverbial and noun phrases are used and are sometimes well-chosen.

A general overview of Level 4 writing
  • Complex sentences (extra clauses).
  • Written in logical paragraphs.
  • Awareness of an appropriate opening and ending.
  • Commas marking clauses.
  • A range of connectives (not just simple ones).
  • Apostrophes used.
  • Adverbs and noun phrases which are appropriate to the task.
A general overview of Level 5 writing
  • Complex sentences, with well-chosen clauses used to have an intentional effect on the reader.
  • Written in well-organised paragraphs that are purposely varied in length for effect and are sometimes linked.
  • Correct use of ambitious/adventurous vocabulary with figurative language used deliberately to have an impact on the reader.
  • Commas used correctly along with a wider range of punctuation (such as brackets, colons, ellipsis and fully punctuated speech).
  • A range of connectives used accurately.
  • Writing style is almost totally appropriate to the task and individual noun phrases and adverbs are chosen for their impact and according to the purpose of the task.

3 comments:

  1. Well done on your writing, I am always glad to see kids writing and blogging their work! Did you enjoy writing these pieces? I reckon enjoyment is the most important part! You can go anywhere in your own mind and then write about it, which is pretty cool i think.

    Well done and keep working hard

    Mr Elliott
    ICT advisor for Wrexham

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  2. Thanks for your comment Mr Elliot.I couldn't agree more!

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  3. Wow, well as a KS1 practitioner these pieces are not like those I usually see! From reading the above criteria my gut is to say L4 for Writer X, L5 for writer Y and L4 for writer Z. In terms of fine levels, I must admit I am now on unknown territory! I will be interested to read & learn from others about where in each level they sit. All writers certainly have the ability to engage their readers!

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